C.J. Mustang

Here are some suggestions: Nightmares burning clearly , pictures vivid in sight pain -- maybe this can be moved down to the next line to give it a better affect> ...

I really liked it, you just maybe had a few minor errors: Dark, empty and confined in a lightless, dirty room within a thousand screaming listless,

I liked it, although I saw a couple things that might need fixing: I watched you go like that, And I couldn’t believe it. I thought you were strong. But ...

I really liked the plot of your story, although I did see many mistakes: Somewhere in an unknown land , i n a country called Sylas ,only one space l ...

Hi, and welcome to this website! I just have to let you know, for every post you put up, you need to have at least 2 reviews first. Now, to ...

I thought this poem was cute, and I loved it! you don't need to change anything to it! :wink:

I really like your poem, although I do have a few suggestions: I lost my lip gloss It's a hostage you see, An ugly old toad stole it from me. ...

I thought your poem was awesome! I just have a few suggestions: Love is a heart, tender and sweet, Love is a body, perfect like a treat. Love is a ...

I liked it, even though I don't quite know what you mean. I have a couple of suggestions: Did you know that your songs are empty to me? Your empty ...

ok, hun, if you're going to write scenes like that, you need detail, and not just go through it fast. It seems like you're rushing your story a bit. I ...

I really really liked it! Was that the entire story, or are you going to make more? I think you should make more! I could totally tell the different personalities ...

Holy crap, I loved it! I honestly didn't find anything wrong with it, but I don't think this would be considered rated 'R'. Now, if you had more description of ...

I really like this prologue. The details you put in it were amazing! I just saw a couple of mistakes: lined heavily with thick, black clouds that cried out thin, ...

Chapter 6 Alexandra awoke with a start. As she rubbed the sleep from her eyes, she shivered in the cool air. The sun barely peaked over the trees, marking the ...

Chapter 5 Alexandra yawned and rubbed her eyes as she walked home from the castle. She hadn't been getting the sleep she needed because of the vision the week before. ...